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A Quite Dangerous Thing

by Ray Colon (writer), Tobyhanna, PA, August 30, 2010

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Pausing to examine one's life can lead to despair. Last year, I wrote this poem about introspection. The post includes a video of my reading.

Have I made a real difference?
I fail to discern
Will my children prosper
as they grow and they learn?
Can I guide them correctly since I am so flawed?
Did I do right by introducing them to God

I tended the altar back when I was a youth
Was convinced that all I had been told was the truth
I’d confess my child sins in that small wooden booth
Seems quite silly now as I grow long in the tooth

My beliefs are my own and not up for debate
I promote peace and love while rejecting the hate
Guarded thoughts and ideas to the forefront I bring
Introspection can be a quite dangerous thing

I feel I am well as I’m run through my paces
Give nary a thought to those shadowy places
Inappropriate themes in my mind overflow
I visit dark quarters we don’t usually go

I don’t hoodwink myself into feeling unique
It is merely deeper understanding I seek
I examine my life and I offer critique
Doubting, no fearing, that I have bypassed my peak

I find little comfort in the news of the day
And when I look inward I am filled with dismay
My efforts feel much like a baseballer’s missed swing
Introspection can be a quite dangerous thing

While not immune to a fit of trepidation
I yearn for moments of untainted elation
Watch my child being born; give a ring to be wed
It’s moments like those that let us know we’re not dead

Much of what transpires results from what we do
Yet oftentimes we fail to reconcile the two
Mistakes repeated are dismissed as déjà vu
It’s to ourselves that we most often are untrue

So what is my problem; over what do I fret?
It isn’t just boredom, a more serious threat
Did I really believe I could unfeel the sting?
Introspection can be a quite dangerous thing

This melancholy moment will soon fade away
But this comprehension with me is bound to stay
People have power, if we admit it or not
To change our perception of what it is we’ve got

We make lifelong decisions of which there are few
Each one contributes to the karma we accrue
We choose those to be near and see us through and through
They leave marks on our soul, those hardest to undo



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6 comments on A Quite Dangerous Thing

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By Theresa H Hall on August 30, 2010 at 02:47 pm

Ray,

You are a deep thinker and your video made your words strike the chords of a story told in prose. As a reader I got your message. As a fellow poet I related to the process.

Your work is meaningful and quietly beautiful. this piece is one the world should read ... and I have never said this to any other poet, ever.

Send a copy to Maya Angelou and ask her for a one page guest spot in her next book. You deserve to be noticed.

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By Jack Bates on August 30, 2010 at 03:14 pm

Theresa covered the quality of your work, I 2nd that. Now to the FANTASTIC use of the video feature, you tube, and BrooWaha to deliver you poem in your voice. From the fade in from a grey background to the last line read you work was imprinted in my mind. I could scroll down as you read and read along, I heard the breaks in your voice as only the author of such a poem could read with, I felt the weight of your words more by your reading of this poem.

This is a great poem, period. What makes this fantastic is how you used the resources that you had available to deliver this poem. All free, too I may add. Your free background, your free BrooWaha author account, your free YouTube video, all of is cleverly put together to deliver an experience.

This is the promise of the web actualized! This has to be the best presentation of any article I've read on BrooWaha.

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By Ray Colon on August 30, 2010 at 03:15 pm

Oh Theresa,

What can I say? This is one of the best comments that I have ever been fortunate enough to receive. You are too kind.

I've written very few poems, as I prefer to write in prose, but I remember feeling particular vexed that day from the moment I woke up. It was a strange sensation -- trying to make myself feel better by digging deeper into what was making me sad in the first place. I felt drained when I finished writing several hours later, but sat to record the video. I haven't experienced that mixture of angst and creativity since that day.

Maya Angelou is terrific, Too terrific for my stuff, I'm afraid. But your suggestion does make for a very nice daydream.

Thanks, Ray

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By Ray Colon on August 30, 2010 at 04:01 pm

Thank you, Jack, for the marvelous review. Pardon me while I blush. :)

You are so right about the many tools we have at our disposal -- and all for the right price. I've long expected YouTube to shift to a pricing model for some of its features, such as HD, but thankfully I have been wrong about that, as the site has remained free for all users. Yes, the backgound was free with attribution, and the music loop download was provided with no strings attached. Lastly, BrooWaha has given my poem a second life, as it had only been viewed by my small group of YouTube subscribers before now. I am greatful for that.

Again, I thank you for the great review and I'm delighted that you enjoyed the experience. Ray

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By Ray Colon on September 01, 2010 at 12:46 pm

Hi TheTAZZone, thanks for commenting and rating. It's much appreciated. Ray

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By Ray Colon on September 01, 2010 at 01:44 pm

Oooo, thanks, Melody, I like that characterization.

Now how do I go about getting my boss to see things this way, again? :) Ray

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