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Porch Lady Talk and a Revolver

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Out My Mind. A young girl gossips of what she heard the "Porch Ladies" say about the Spiritual Rebirth of a neighborhood woman. (Short Story)

Let it go. Let it go..Let me go.
Something got a hold. Gripped tight. Tethered. Tied and wrapped.
Wound and bound.Thick wire looped around a large spindle.
Spun and Spiraled... Got me Circled
Mashed and grounded into powder and sprinkled on others chosen paths..rubbed out fresh and flat. Then blown apart.
Dazed and dizzy..LOST. Fragmented and disconnected. Jumbled
Heavy Headed.
Spent and bought.
Sold and Resold to the cheapest bidder. Shiny hat and shiny shoes. Cheap metal and faded gold.
Exchanged and bartered. A bargain. Hustled OUT MY MIND..

(Pointing in their direction)..Dem Porch Ladies say, she came home from church..and must've caught the Spirit.

Dey say... when she walked in her house..they heard hollering and shouting. A choir of loud revolution. Dey say the walls was singing sumpin' fierce!

Then dey say...7 horsemen came a running and she came a flying.

Flapping and flat footed..BARE! Right out her house! She was leaping and hopping off the ground.

Dey say, she even levitated! Say she lifted so high, that Ol' Man Perry tried to rope her down..but he couldn't. (I ain't lying..dat's what dey say)

Dem' porch ladies say ...Dat girl was so hot and feverish that she was turned beet burnt red. And..dey say, she was dripping wet like somebody had dipped her in the river. Water was just pouring off of her.

The Porch Ladies say, she caught the Holy Ghost!

She was speaking in tongues and scripture-fying. Quoting em' like she wrote the book.

Leviticus 20:10 Leviticus 20:25 Luke 11:40

Mat 23:17 "Is it the Gold or the Temple that makes it?" she shouted. "Who am I? I'm the Temple..ain't I?"

Jeremiah 48:10 "I do the Lords Work!!! I do the Lords Work!"

Exodus 35:2.."God said it!!! God said it!!!"

(proclaiming) "Deeze' ain't my words..Deeze' Gods!"

Dey' say, she started singing about how she been changed.. Dat finally, she been saved. She say she was healed by the blood.

Then dey' say..she started shouting! She was shaking and moving real fast. At one time, she even threw down her bible and started church dancing on it.

She threw up, not long after that! Yep. That's what Ms. Mattie say. (Nodding) She got sick sumptin' real bad.

Say she got silent all a sudden.. then everything turned dark like a bad storm was coming. She vomited all over the porch steps then fell slain in the spirit. Down still..she lay.

The Horseman didn't go up there (pointing to the porch) until they was sure she wasn't getting up.

Once they got up there, they rolled her over..and dat's when they saw the revolver.

Dat man over der' (pointing) him in dat gray shirt...He say the walls is covered in blood. I seen em' bringing bags out all day.

Mama say..the Coroner told her dat he ain't neva seen nothing like dis' in his 25 years of working and picking up bodies!

Bout time the Pastor and all dem' church folk showed up..she was already gone. But dey say, dey keeping vigil for the rest of the week.

So, there they are (pointing across the street). Dey been out there... slow-singing and bringing flowers all day.

......"Umph.Umph. Umph." (Heads shake).

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By mantra lotus on July 14, 2011 at 02:18 pm

Thanks Cher:)

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By mantra lotus on July 14, 2011 at 02:18 pm

Thanks Cher:)

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By Caballero_69 on July 14, 2011 at 03:37 pm


Once you are discovered and become all the rage will you still remember us here at Broo?

Regardless, I can assure you we will remember you!

The dialogoue, the content of the story; the perfect match of the picture with the implications of the story and the marvelous video make this a triple treat!

What a combination you have produced here today. Literary, visual, cinemagraphic and musical. It is not a triple treat; it is a grand slam!


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By mantra lotus on July 14, 2011 at 06:04 pm

Yes!!! Most Definitely! @ Larry. How could I ever forget my (start). You guys have brought so much out of me..More than I ever imagined I had. my inspiration!

..."A Grand Slam!" I'm lovin' that :-)

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By Jack Bates on July 14, 2011 at 06:09 pm

some great flash fiction that paints a vivid picture, each word relevant, well done.

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By mantra lotus on July 14, 2011 at 06:12 pm

Hey Bill! Like I just said to's all you guys. You bring it out.

Umm? Quit..You? Never! We're all doing GREAT..because we're pushing each other. Isn't it beautiful? How we're all so different in our writing styles yet so spectacular. WE are doing Bill! Whew..Finally. And, I'd like to believe that it's because we have one another as support.

P.S. "Special K" all day. Vanilla with almonds..(I'm munching on it dry right

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By mantra lotus on July 14, 2011 at 06:13 pm

Hey there Jake! Thanks :-)

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